Do not read if you've not read GOOD!!!!
So right now I'm thinking this story will be a two-parter. That means the sequel to Good will also be the conclusion.
Title: Better
Release Date: Yeah right
Genre: New Adult contemporary romance
Book Description: Not yet
Now remember: This is rough, raw, and unedited.
Chapter 1 - Motivation
He
watched her tiny shoulders shake with laughter. She pressed the dry erase
marker against the board to hold it steady, but it was no use. Her laughter
forced it up and down and sideways, muddying the numbers he’d written out for
her.
“I’m
not. I swear.” He chuckled. “And now you get to start all over.”
“Ugh!
Help me, please,” she said, turning around to look at him.
He
studied the wisps that framed her face, the afternoon sunlight catching them and
setting them on fire. Her hairline, temples, and cheeks glowed. She looked like
a porcelain doll.
She
grinned and shook her head. “I still don’t believe you.”
He
grinned back. “I know.”
He
walked to the board and erased her mess. And then he rewrote the numbers and waited
for her to start the problem. He wouldn’t baby her this time. He’d done it
every time before. All it took was a little pout and the upturn of those sad
blue eyes. He was a sucker, and he knew it. But not this time. This time she’d
have to work for it.
“You
know this, Cadence,” he said encouragingly.
She
nodded and took a deep breath. He thought it was cute. He couldn’t help it. She
was steeling herself for the mental workout.
He
watched her furrow her brows.
No, he thought. Don’t
you dare.
And
then her face clouded over.
Cadence . . .
“Mr.
Connelly, I don’t think . . .”
“Yes
you do,” he said. “You can do this, Cadence.”
She
chewed her lip and made a decision. She turned her pretty little face towards
him, tilted her chin a fraction of an inch, and looked up with her big, sad
blue eyes. And then she blinked. And waited.
Goddamnit!
Mr.
Connelly sighed. “Okay. I’ll start you off.”
“Thank
you,” she whispered.
He saw
her tuck her chin to hide the grin playing at the corners of her lips. She knew
she won. Again. And he couldn’t be frustrated with her. He wanted to kiss the
top of her head instead—right at the point where her hair parted. His admission
of defeat.
She
turned her face to him again, marker poised inches from the white board.
“Well?
Let’s do this, Mr. Connelly.”
He
smiled. “Okay, Cadence.”
There
was no going back.
“Are
you out of your fucking mind?”
Mark
sighed and popped the cap of his Newcastle. He took a swig, then shrugged.
“Uh,
no. You don’t get to shrug. You have to answer my question. What the hell,
man?” Dylan said. He took the beer Mark handed him.
“She’s
. . . she’s just . . .” He searched for the words, frustrated that they
wouldn’t come easier.
“You
need a song?” Dylan joked.
“Shut
up, man.”
Dylan
laughed and grabbed a record off the back counter. He slid it over to Mark.
“Go
put that on,” he said.
Mark
rolled his eyes and walked to the closest record player. He pulled the vinyl
from its sleeve and placed it on the turntable. He lifted the arm, then paused.
“She’s
like a clean slate,” he said quietly.
“Yeah.
One you plan to dirty up,” Dylan replied.
“No,”
Mark said. “That’s not it.” He placed the needle carefully on the vinyl. “Good
choice, by the way,” he said, listening as the distinctive sound of The Killers
filled the tiny space of the record store.
“I
know,” Dylan replied, downing his beer.
“I
don’t wanna mess her up,” Mark said. “I want her to make me a clean slate like
her.”
He
said it facing the record player. He couldn’t look at his friend, but he sensed
the immediate tension in the room. There was a long stretch of silence before
Dylan spoke. Mark watched the record spin as he finished his beer.
“Look
man, I know everything with Andy—”
“Don’t
say her name,” Mark said. “Just, please don’t.”
Dylan
took a deep breath. “How is this high school chick gonna help you, Mark? She’s
in high
school. She’s nowhere near your maturity
level, experience level—”
“I
don’t want her to be,” Mark said. He turned around and walked back to the
counter, hoisting himself up on it and reaching for a second beer. “You want
another?”
Dylan
shook his head. “I’m on the clock.”
Mark
smirked. “Well, I’m not.” He popped the cap and took a long, satisfying gulp.
“I don’t want her to know anything.”
“What?
So you can corrupt her?”
“No. I
just like her innocence.”
“Yeah,
so you can corrupt it.”
“Shut
up, man. That’s not it.” Mark thought for a moment. He took another sip of beer
and scratched the stubble on his cheek. “She doesn’t hurt.”
“I don’t
even know what the hell that means,” Dylan mumbled.
“Yeah,
you do,” Mark replied, looking his friend in the face.
Dylan
shifted uncomfortably and nodded.
“She’s
this beautiful little thing. And I want it.”
“You
can’t use her like that,” Dylan said.
“I’m
not!” Mark snapped. “It’s not like that. I don’t wanna use her. I’m attracted
to her. I’m attracted to her smile and her laugh and her hair and the way she
talks—”
“Stop,”
Dylan ordered. “You’re making me sick.”
Mark
laughed. “I really like her. And I know it’s unwise, okay? I know all this. But
you don’t understand. She’s just there, all the time, shining.”
“‘Shining’?
God, you’re a fruitcake,” Dylan said. His words were laced with light contempt.
“English majors . . .”
Mark
chuckled and took another sip of beer.
“Okay,
so what do you plan to do with the shining girl?” Dylan asked. He watched the
smile spread across his friend’s face.
“Love
her.”
“Yeah,
and then the shining girl puts you behind some shiny metal bars. Mark, you’re a
smart guy. Use your head. And I mean this one,” he said, pointing to his
temple.
Mark
shook his head. “You haven’t met her.”
“I’m
sure she’s like every other teenage girl,” Dylan replied. “And I’m not saying I
wouldn’t wanna hit that, but society kinda has a problem with it, in case you
didn’t know. You wanna look like some child predator?”
Mark
grimaced.
“Exactly.
I don’t care how fucking shiny she is. Some things you don’t touch.”
“She’s
not a child.”
“How
old is she?”
“Eighteen.”
“How
do you know?”
“Well,
I don’t. I think she’s eighteen.”
“Dude.
Step AWAY from the shiny object.”
Mark
laughed. “I don’t think so, Dylan. I don’t think I can.”
Dylan
shook his head. “You know I’m there for you, man. Any way this goes.”
“You
think I’m messed up, don’t you?” Mark asked.
“No. I
think she mesmerized you. I think you’re lonely and jaded and looking for
anything out there that’s the opposite of all the shit you’ve been through—”
“Dylan
. . .”
“No,
man. We gotta be able to talk about it. It’s been two years, Mark. You’re not
the only one who still hurts over what happened to Andy.”
The
chime of the doorbell broke the intensity of the moment. Mark listened,
detached, as a group of teenagers shuffled into the store, chattering. Dylan
shot up from his chair, immediately on guard.
“Fucking
kids,” he muttered.
Mark
smirked. “They haven’t done anything. Chill out.”
The
men watched as the teens wove in and out of aisles, laughing and punching one
another’s arms. Mark heard one of them say “sweet ass” and instantly thought of
Cadence.
“Oh
God,” he whispered, running his hands roughly over his face.
“What’s
wrong with you?” Dylan asked, eyeing a boy who was rifling through a stack of
classic rock albums.
“Nothing.”
“Hey!
What can I help you boys find?” Dylan yelled.
They
turned in his direction, catching sight of the six pack on the counter.
One
exclaimed, “Dude! You drink at work?”
“My
store. My rules,” Dylan replied.
They
all nodded, impressed.
“That’s
cool, man,” another boy replied. “Need anyone to work part-time?”
“Not
one,” Dylan said. “Need help finding a record?”
“Not
one,” someone else replied.
The
boys snickered.
Dylan
cracked a smile. “Then why don’t you get the hell outta my store.”
The
teens froze before shuffling out, spitting timid insults at Dylan as they went.
“Dude,
you’re a freaking asshole,” Mark said.
“No,
I’m not. Those shits stole from me before. It took me a minute to remember. But
I remember. That little blond shit . . .”
“Why
didn’t you report them?” Mark asked. “And why don’t you get your cameras
fixed?”
“Unimportant,”
Dylan said. “We’re not talking about stolen records. We’re talking about Andy.”
Mark
took a deep breath.
“She
was my friend, too, Mark,” Dylan said softly.
Silence.
Mark
opened another beer. “I know she was.”
Mark’s eyes flew open. He lay frozen in bed, engulfed in
darkness, completely unaware of the girl lying next to him, breathing heavy and
even. That sweet sound of contented sleep. He could think of nothing but that
afternoon at Dylan’s store, sitting on the counter drinking too many beers,
talking openly for the first time about the girl who disappeared under a white
sheet stained red. The girl who promised him forever, then bled it out on an
operating table. The girl he loved.
Forever.
He turned his head to look at the living girl beside him.
The girl who lay naked under his sheets, golden hair draped over her neck,
acting as a scarf against the chill of the bedroom. He reached out to touch her
hair, smoothing it through his fingers.
She nodded in her sleep, then opened her eyes. She’d done
this before, and he knew she wasn’t awake.
“I love you,” he whispered.
“I know,” she replied. “Why do you have bad dreams?”
He froze.
“Why?”
“Cadence, are you awake?” he asked carefully.
“Why do you have bad dreams, Mark?” she replied. “Why?”
“I don’t have bad dreams,” he said. “Go back to sleep.” He
ran his fingers through her hair once more.
“Okay, but I don’t believe you,” she mumbled, and closed her
eyes. He waited until he heard the heavy, even breathing once more before
slinking soundlessly out of bed.
He walked to the kitchen and opened the refrigerator. And then
he stared blankly at the contents inside, deciding if he wanted food or drink.
He wasn’t hungry. No to food. He wasn’t thirsty either, though that beer looked
refreshing. But he didn’t need refreshment. He needed an escape.
It didn’t happen often—remembering. Once Cadence walked into
the picture, he determined to bury the past, or, at least, the finer details.
He’d never forget her. He didn’t want
to. But the details. Well, those he could bury. But every now and then he’d
still dream of the past, and those finer details that would otherwise escape
his memory during the day burst about his subconscious at night, demanding
recognition. They took control of his dreams, and he’d wake some mornings
soaked with sweat. He thought Cadence never knew. She never said anything about
it until tonight.
He closed the refrigerator door and walked back to the
bedroom. He stood over his girlfriend, watching her sleep. She was far away
from him, in her own dreamland, and he couldn’t stand the distance. Not
tonight.
He pulled back the sheet and watched her curl into a fetal
position. Her hand searched for the covers, but he made sure to keep them away
from her grasp. He couldn’t get enough of it—staring at her nakedness. She was
so tiny, so fair. A little fallen angel, he thought.
His.
copyright S. Walden, 2013
Wow. I can't wait to figure out why Mark is the way he is. I want to love him but I have a feeling you are going to make us work for it in the next book.
ReplyDeleteMaybe a little. Honestly, right now my scenes are such a jumble that I don't exactly know at what point in the novel the truth comes out. For some reason I'm thinking midway, but there are hints leading up to it.
DeleteLoved this! Can't wait to read!!
ReplyDeleteOMG. That was sooo good. I hope this comes out this year & you don't make us wait until 2014. :D
ReplyDeleteSpent all of yesterday reading "Good." I just couldn't put it down! I so look forward to finding out what happened with Mark, Cadence & Avery.
ReplyDeleteThank you for spending time with my story. I think that's the most awesome compliment--when people tell me they read a story of mine straight through. <3
DeleteI love that you give us these little extra vignettes, that the story is not bound to the confines of a book. Eagerly awaiting the continuation of Good and anything else you put a pen to. You've got a reader for life.
ReplyDeleteWow! Thank you, Chrystie! <3
DeleteI just finished Good and it was brilliant! I can not wait until Better...well, I can; I just really don't want to!
ReplyDeleteHa ha! I won't make you wait too long. I promise :)
DeleteWrite faster!!!
ReplyDeleteLook it: it's delicate work when you've gotta figure out how to make your hero forgivable after he spanks the hell out of your heroine. :)
Deleteomg im excited!!! Mark is so complicated, I don't understand him but i have a feeling i'll start to like him in the next book. Im praying for avery tbh lol
ReplyDeleteI think it'll help significantly that you'll be able to get inside his brain. I've said this before: third person POV is my favorite way to tell a story. It allows a reader to distance herself from the characters if she wants, but then also hear all of their thoughts instead of being restricted through a first person POV narration. Btw--I'm praying for Avery to be happy, too.
DeleteI loved Good! I loved Cadence and Mark and this excerpt tells me that I will love the next book!
ReplyDeleteThat's the hope! Actually, I hope you love the sequel more <3
DeleteWhoa....I am even more intrigued and cant wait to hear more about Mark's story..
ReplyDeleteOh, you're gonna get it. All of it. ;)
DeleteI just finished Good, so refreshing, humorous, deep, different. In short I loved it. I hear what you are saying, but pleeeaase don't take a long time with Better. I can't wait
ReplyDeleteYou won't wait too long. I'm not cruel. I am tired at the moment, though. But the sequel is coming right along. :)
DeleteOmg I cannot wait for this book! I just finished reading Good and I could not put it down. Now I'm anxiously awaiting Better and I hope the wait isn't too long :)
ReplyDeleteHey Angelica,
DeleteIt won't be long at all. I promise. <3
xo Summer
I just finished Good and it was AMAZING!! I can't wait for Better...thank you for sharing these excerpts!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Margaret! xo
DeleteAs a mom with a 2 yr old n hot hubs, I find it hard to read the books I choose as I quick as I want. Don't get me wrong I still devour 4 adult/cont/para books a month. When I read going under I was blown away n stayed up basically for 2 days, but I set a record with Good. My hubs told me to shut up 5x last night as I laughed out loud ALL NIGHT! I literally read it in one night.... when will number 2 grace our world
ReplyDeleteHey Justine,
DeleteThank you so much for choosing to read my books! That means a lot, and I'm so happy you enjoyed Good. I'm also happy that I could make you laugh out loud--no easy task to get humor to translate appropriately on the page. I'm glad you "got it."
I have a tentative date set for Book 2, but I'm not sharing until I know for certain that I'll meet my deadline. Hang tight. It won't be long :)
xo Summer
I'm usually pretty skeptical when it comes to NA with high ratings, and since Good was ALL over my GR newsfeed, I admittedly stayed away. Until I didn't, and I wish I had, simply because waiting to find out what happens next just might be the death of me.
ReplyDeleteThank you for restoring my faith in NA, and more specifically, Indie authors. Can't wait to read more from you. <3
Hey Raquel,
DeleteYou've no idea what your words mean to me. Thank you for taking a chance on Good. I can't wait to get Better to you. And you won't have to wait much longer. Editing as we speak!
<3 Summer
freaking excited for this. and already have an idea about what happened to Mark but i really want to know what will happen. the truth not just what my imagination is conjuring. ugh! itching to have the next book. your books are AWESOME! :)
ReplyDeletexoxo
DeleteOk, so I spent my day off in bed reading Good. Wow. Great book can't wait for the second book. I hope Cadence and Avery stick together and maintain their friendship. Can't wait to read how it all turns out.
ReplyDeleteIf you're interested in reading a little bit from the sequel. May answer a question or two ;)
Deletehttp://shhmomsreading.com/blog-tour-and-giveaway-good-too-good-1-by-s-walden/
Oh my gosh, this is amazing!! I can't wait to read the full book!! :)
ReplyDeleteI apologize for ignoring Good just because I didn't like the cover(ya,I know lame ..but that's just me) however yesterday I was checking some website and lot of people had mentioned it as their favourite or loved it so I decided to find out what the fuss was all about....
ReplyDeleteU won't believe, I spent half the night reading it..could not put it down till I finished it! now I know why it was all over -It was freaking awesome! infact,I loved it more than C.R.,which I was awaiting for with bated breath...
can't wait for part 2...
LOL! You didn't like my cover? Aww shucks. It's actually my favorite so far out of all my books ;) I'm so glad you took a chance on the novel anyway, and even happier that you enjoyed it! Can't wait to get Better to you. Nov. 19. Not too much longer.
Delete<3 Summer
This novel makes me angry,emotional ( i mean that was awesome,never feel emotional like this when read a novel.Seriously,feels like rollercoaster at first i pity cadence and then i hate her )
ReplyDeleteMaybe i'm too religious...cadance and avery even mark pissed me,i hate them butt i LOVE your novel,i like the emotional feeling....What's wrong with me???
Can't wait for BETTER ...hope everyone can get their happiness (hope cadance ,her familly and grace can stick together again...Well..i don't think her family and grace the bad one...it's just candace..blind because of her love)
There's nothing wrong with you. There would be something wrong with me as a writer, however, if I couldn't elicit those emotions from you. I'm excited to get Better to you. Not long now. Nov. 19 is fast approaching!
Delete<3 Summer
I just read Good straight. through. First time for me, and I read 3-4 books a week. It kept me thinking, laughing, and crying throughout. It's amazing to me that I could both love and hate Cadence and Mark at the same time. Being an avid romance reader, I'm always looking for the heroine to get the guy, but this book had me confused, flustered, and sometimes a little pissed off. When you read 150+ a year, it takes a special one to stand out. Last year, that book was The Edge of Never for me. This year? Good. 5+ stars
ReplyDeleteLeslie,
DeleteWhat a compliment! Thank you so much! I really hope you enjoy the sequel as much as the first book.
<3 Summer
Summer I love your writing but please warn me if you're gonna tear my freaking heart out like you did in Hoodie. Even though I'm gonna read Better no matter what, I need to know if I should start looking for a therapist now. So excited for the sequel girl and can't wait to see what's next.
ReplyDeleteYou don't need to look for a therapist ;) I'm sorry, though, that I tore your heart out with Hoodie. I really did end the story the way I felt was most real. Anything else would have sounded cheesy and contrived. I know readers want their HEAs. I totally get it--escape, fantasy, all that. There's the rub when it comes to my storytelling because I write realistic fiction. I have to be true to the story, even if it ends up eliciting some tears. :( Don't hate me.
DeleteHi, I'm currently 10% into reading Good right now, and I sort of have this tendency to check the ending of a book before reading it... so far I'm hooked, and I couldn't help but check this excerpt out. It made me more curious. And I love the how the writing goes, so I kind of can't wait. :)
ReplyDelete- Wafiyah
I'm excited to get Better to you! Not long now--Nov. 19 will be here before we know it!
DeleteDon't check the ending of Going Under before you read it, if you choose to. Would ruin the whole thing for you. And DEFINITELY don't do it with Better ;) Don't you wanna be surprised?